I enjoyed reading the piece. I feel it was an apt and real representation of the artwork. In saying that, I have two points of constructive criticism. Firstly, I think adding the actual topic you’re responding to would be helpful for the reader. Secondly, I think rereading and assessing the sixth paragraph might be helpful. There is usage of “and” twice close together in the second sentence which doesn’t make it flow nicely. The second sentence is also quite long which does make it a lot to process. Despite these points I think this is a good piece just in need of slight refinement.
Peer review two
Jared Marks' Brain 